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Miho Kitagawa
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spider laser concept sketch comments

Client 1:

I like this laser emitter -- could be a very neat prop.

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Reviewer 2:

This laser spider idea is really complicated and intense-looking. Will the lasers crawl around like spiders, or be stationary and wave their arms? If this aesthetic and sort of motion/mechanical activity is used across the whole experience, it could be really cool. How exactly does it leap from a passive element to an aggressive one?

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Reviewer 3:

I like the fact that the spider can traverse walls. The creature-like tendencies are nice as well. From a human factors perspective, the movement of the spider would be very noticeable allowing people to focus on the laser.

It would be nice to know how the spider is able to traverse the wall.

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Reviewer 4:

I like how you "humanized" the laser. Very cute and lets the users know immediately and subtly that the laser is there and that you don't want to bother it. The dramatic change from its sleeping to active modes would be really cool visual effect.

Seems very feasible and fun effect!

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Reviewer 5:

I think this sketch definitely gives me a feeling for what the laser would look like.

It's great that it's not just a simple laser.

The additional design and detail makes it feel more like something sci-fi.

The activation and "sleep" idea- and the personification of the laser also seems very sci-fi, and I think this is something that could definitely be feasible.

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eva touch concept sketch comments

Client 1:

This is a neat prop element -- I don't fully understand how it fits into the experience.

The top opens when hit by the laser?

Why? What is inside?

How do the guests know to do this?

I like the hand-scanner gag a lot, that could be very cool.

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Reviewer 2:

Again, this seems like a really complicated element - interesting for sure, but complicated to realize what all the portions of it are for. I wonder if decoupling some of the feedback (bubbles, lights and eventual explosion) would make each more impactful in separate settings. The idea of having a state change where it is 'broken' as part of the gameplay is cool.

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Reviewer 3:

The messaging would definitely be needed here to let users know what they should do. The addition of more bubbles and differing color is a good touch as you are getting the message across on two fronts.

Overall, I'm not sure if this quite fits the theme of the room. The bubbles seem a bit out of place.

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Reviewer 4:

Cool visual and looks fun. I'm just concerned that it can only be experienced by one person and that person may cover up the station and obstruct the view for the rest of the group if not designed properly.

I appreciate your initial idea for resetting, but I wish it was explored a bit more for dramatic effect. Also, it probably doesn't need the instruction at the top - looks pretty self-explanatory.

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Reviewer 5:

I get how the scanner works from the image but I'm a little confused on what it would be used for.

I like the hand written comments to explain each piece of the drawing since there is a lot going on.

The drawing definitely shows me what I would encounter when I saw the Eva Touch.

From a feasibility standpoint, I'm not sure, It seems like something you've thought about though!

I like the bubbling inside- Cool effects like that are what captivates people.

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face + hand concept sketch comments

Client 1:

neat idea.

Is it a screen -- do those message appear on it?

What is the purpose of this device -- how does it play into a challenge or plot point for the guests?

Perhaps this triggers laser, when it scans the guest and finds a human instead of an alien -- is that the intention?

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Reviewer 2:

Only one person can use this at a time, and it seems like a time-intensive thing for each person to go through before the gameplay actually ensues. The design considerations that you have thought of make sense for implementation, but a simpler approach might be faster for throughput to get the game started, and could engage more people simultaneously.

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Reviewer 3:

The dynamic height wall mounting serves a wide number of users. The actuation of the scanning mechanism looks to be a nice effect.

I'm a bit confused on its purpose in the room. Perhaps as an alternative to eva touch?

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Reviewer 4:

I like how you made the design to accommodate different heights. Looks very futuristic and the visual effect would be visible to the rest of the group, making it an interesting experience for the person being scanned and also for the people standing around at that point.

It would be even better if your alert system was more dramatic!

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Reviewer 5:

This is a really cool idea.

It seems like something that could be really neat to build and interact with.

I like the physical interaction from the capacitive sensor and the ability to move to the height of the user.

It would be cool if everyone in the group could use it.

There is something awesome about the personal interaction that the user would have with this- up close and personal.

I'm not sure how the screen would look- would you use a camera? or just the stock radiation images you drew?

I really think this would be feasible and could be something cool to go forward with.

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Overall concept sketch clarity and presentation

Client 1:

Drawings are beautiful, descriptions are helpful.

More context to understand how these discrete elements might fit into the overall user experience could be helpful.

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Reviewer 2:

The sketches themselves are really attractive and show a lot of thought put into them. This page of the website is clear, but the homepage with the shifty grid is confusing to interact with.

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Reviewer 3:

The sketches were nice and the touches of color made certain elements pop.

There could be some added detail and shading to make things clearer. For instance, in the face and hands scan, the perspective doesn't allow a full understanding of what someone would view when they are using the scanner.

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Reviewer 4:

Great drawings, Miho! Your vision is expressed very clearly and your drawings have just the right amount of captions. Good use of color as well.

Great website design - fits the sci-fi theme and puts focus around your drawings. However, I wish there was a link back to the storyboard. Also, the click and hold was an interesting effect to show text, but it also adds a little extra effort on the users' end. You can achieve the same effect by making the texts appear when the user hovers over.

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Reviewer 5:

While the animation on the website looks really cool, and the whole website has a great design, I found it difficult to navigate the storyboard and dizzying to look at. However, I like that your individual website was more static.

I like the simple use of color and consistency throughout the website, and the web presentation is great. The sketches themselves also showed great clarity and simplicity.

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