Peter Davis

21w.765j Assignment #1

http://web.mit.edu/21w765j/Spring98/p2/final2/colosseum/erik7.html

One thing I liked about this story ("One o'Clock at the Colloseum") was how

the storyline started and ended together (the end starts on this page), but

splits in the middle. I liked how the reader could jump from group to

group, and person to person, but always moving forward in time.

http://web.mit.edu/21w765j/Spring_97/StudentWork_SP97/ProjectOne_SP97/drew-project1/bathroom4.html

I found "A Tale of Two Frums" to be a funny and interesting story, but I

believe that the navigation could definitely be improved. The open and

closed door icons aren't immediately intuitive as stay or go, and I found

that if I consistently chose poorly, I could wind up with a very

uninteresting story with no characters around. I would suggest adding some

text to each button describing where it will take you, and also perhaps

adding more action to the story so that the reader is never bored in a room,

or else giving more of a cue (perhaps a visual display) as to where the

interesting stuff is happening and allowing the reader to navigate directly

there.