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The wise writer varies sentence structure and length to keep the reader's interest. |
If you followed my advice, you are now writing short, active-voice sentences. That's good. What's bad is that you can end up with pretty bland prose. For example:
No Variety
Upside | Every sentence is short and descriptive, active voice. |
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Downside | Weak sentence variety. Every sentence has same subject (Bonds) and same verb (hit). Gets boring quickly. |
Digression | In a speech, repetition can be quite powerful. |
To enhance sentence variety, do the following:
Variety
Bonds hit 73 home runs this year, all of them from the right side. Barry sprayed low pitches and high pitches, curves and fastballs to all three fields.
Variety
Bonds struck 73 home runs this year. Batting righty, he attacked a wide range of pitches with equal vigor. Battling Barry hit with astonishing power to all three fields.
Good writers focus on transitions. Common transition terms include the following:
Without Transitions | With Transitions |
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The C compiler can process 1,000 lines of code per second. The rate is slower when the host is fully loaded." | The C compiler can process 1,000 lines of code per second. However, the rate is slower when the host is fully loaded. |
Commercial airplanes can cruise at altitudes up to 12 miles. The Concorde cruises at 60,000 feet. The Boeing 747 cruises at 39,000 feet. | Commercial airplanes can cruise at altitudes up to 12 miles. For example, the Concorde cruises at 60,000 feet. However, the Boeing 747 cruises at only 39,000 feet. |
It is tempting to start a sentence with "But" or "And." But don't do it in technical writing. And here's why: "but" and "and" are conjunctions, great for intrasentence transitions but not appropriate for intersentence transitions.