From: "Zone Red" <zonered@hotmail.com>
Subject: Re: [WRITERS] SUB: Pilgrimage (Captivity - 6) [1]
Date: Mon, 11 Jan 1999 06:40:27 PST

Hi Tink,
     I really do not know how to Crit this piece. No experience and not 
sure what to crit to begin with since I wouldn't consider myself 
knowledgeable of grammer etc. 
     Nontheless, I wanted to say that I like this story. There was a 
haunting quality that kept me reading to the end. You made me want to 
know about this woman and her window views. 
     Is this a continuing story?? Will there be more?? If so then my 
comment of, "I think her character needs to be developed more," is going 
to be wasted. IMHO she is worthy of her life story being told. Her 
paranoia and fears, her unrequited love for this "gentleman". Why she 
was alone to begin with?? Even more on the embroidery and its contents 
and struggles to create. And with a fuller understanding of her 
desparate desire to want to committe suicide. 
     Thanks for this story Tink, I enjoyed it. 


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