Hi Jennifer! I had never heard of Brazilian Jiu-Jitsu before, so this was very interesting as a learning experience for me. Here are some of my comments on the content of your human use analysis:

-Your disclaimer at the beginning to the prof/ta was not necessary--we can analyze an electronic or non-electronic device as we please! Also, it made this seem less like a website for a portfolio and more just like an assignment (which it is, but thats not the point of us putting this online).

-User journey map--great touch. It really contextualized the experience for me, a non BJJ practitioner, and helped parse out the different milestones.

-I wish you had done some more outside research on the subject. What does a professional BJJ practitioner use? What do olympians use? Are there preferred brands within the community? What is the normal lifespan of a BJJ bag?

-I would have benefited from some more in depth analysis of the pros of the current BJJ bag situation, as well as more information into your own user experience with using the bags!

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The analysis is concise with the assignment proposal and brings up some interesting points about the theme. However, I must emphasize at least two major concerns. 1) The very purpose of an introduction is to introduce the topic or, in this case, the object of study of the analysis. In your introduction page, however, not much is said about the bag that you are taking as your instrument of analysis, but instead, a lot is said about general Jiu-Jitsu as a sport, what, yes, it is indeed relevant to the theme, but should not be the primary topic. Therefore, by the end of the introduction, the reader cannot be 100% sure of what are you analyzing. 2) The overall analysis needs more details. Most of the points of view made over the object of study are just not developed throughout the content. They are quickly stated, and then no more is said or commented about them.

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I like your intro as it frames the situation and the issue at hand. I also commend you for trying something new to analyze. I think you did a good job explaining the issues at play and why there is a need for this product in the first place. You help to familirize one with an unfamiliar subject.I like the user journey map that you lay out and think it helps in getting in the mind of the user, and understanding their motivations. I also like that you took a poll of people to get a better understanding of what people use. It was a little unclear as to why you were showing the two gym bags and what goes into them, when I thought we were talking about gi only. Maybe work on making this more clear. Another thing is I like your solution, its just very unclear what is going on in your illustration and I think adding a little more here would really help clarify things.

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I loved that you picked a non-electronic device to analyze. The BJJ bag is a great product to analyze because it is part of the larger BJJ experience.

The content of your first page (Intro) is written really well. It really explained BJJ in a way that made me interested (and I have no experience or knowledge in any type of grappling/Judo sport or martial arts) and really explained why a BJJ bag is an important part of the BJJ gi experience. This first page made me want to click onwards immediately to read about the hygiene/odor/weight problems I can already imagine with the bag. Unfortunately the image is the first page is not loading for me, but the content was written well enough to make up for it!

The next page, (Current Experience) is even better! I enjoyed how informative and unique this page was... I expected the usual "key user needs" list but instead the pie chart, 'what's in my bag' photos, and the genius "user journey" chart is much more relevant and effective for this product. I've never seen a goals, emotions, task, item list for a product but it was very effective for this analysis, especially as a reader who is not familiar with the BJJ experience.

Two improvements I would suggest would be to include more quotes from people you've interviewed, because I'd like to see a wider range in perspective, and to include a more detailed sketch of your improved design.

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Hey--my main comment for your website is that when I open it there is no CSS. Did you make a CSS for this? If you did, it probably didn't get uploaded correctly or something, because right now I am just looking at a white page with plain text. I do have some comments in general though:

-Make sure that you are paying attention to your text paragraphs! There are many instances where the text isn't capitalized at the beginning of a sentence, or there is no space between two words. Also there are some redundancies, such as "the current solution gymbag solution" on your experience page.

-Some image links are broken, so they do not appear at all. other images are there, but they are extremely large and take up more than 2x the width of my browser. I had to zoom out to 30% to see the entire images of the gym bags on your second page.

-Both of the labels of the gym bags on your second page are above the images, so I do not know which image is the men's bag and which is the women's.

-Navigation at the bottom was a good touch, I liked being able to go to the next page without having to scroll back up.

-Your solution drawing is a good start, but it is difficult to see any changes between your solution and a normal backpack. The labels help, but I wish the actual drawing conveyed these changes. Maybe play with line weight? Go back over the important parts with a marker to identify them better.

-Your handwriting writing over the top of the user journey map is difficult to read, and the colors clash which doesnt help. I think this information would have been clearer in a text box to the side, which arrows pointing to the specific parts.

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The overall presentation is not very good. It could be highly improved in both visual and architectural aspects. I will point out one suggestion from each one of these aspects. 1) Add colors to your layout. Colors are very useful to drive the reader attention to wherever you want, so make use of this trick to your benefit. 2) Refine your image and text formatting. Most images are just way too big, to the point where you cannot visualize any of them if you don't have a 30" monitor, while the text is presented in a tinny font size across the whole page, what makes reading quite uncomfortable on wide aspect monitors. Lastly, I must, however, point out that this is one of the few analysis that presented a sketch of the final reimagined model of your object of study. This is a very positive point that I wish I had seen in more analysis.

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I like that you have the little text tabs at the top that tell what page you are on now and help navigate to other pages. I do with that these were more stylized and maybe laid out across the top. There was also an image missing on the first page which made me not be able whatever you were trying to display. I also really like that there is a next section tab in the bottom of the page so that I do not have to scroll back up to continue onward. Some things that could be improved: your text adjust to different window sizes but your images are very very large and I had to zoom out to see them. It was also very hard to read what was on the user map in the improvement analysis and think it would be better of you had typed this not op rather then written it. I also think adding some simple color and stylizing the page a little more by changing the layout and having the title in the middle could make it look a lot better.

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In terms of clarity and presentation, I really appreciate the time you took to collect and take good photos. I think the site can be improved with a header, and by removing the confusing square next to "Human Use Analysis". The photo on the Intro page is not displaying, and many of the photos on 'Current Experience' are too big and you have to scroll left and right to see them. Resizing and double checking the photos would help enhance your great content!

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